tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post8074298519445174545..comments2024-03-25T11:29:49.222-07:00Comments on That Wee Bit Heap: Friday Feedback #2gae polisnerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10491813685110351809noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-50947987795868213932010-12-13T16:24:53.441-08:002010-12-13T16:24:53.441-08:00Something about the writing made me think female b...Something about the writing made me think female but I'm thinking it might have just reminded me of my character, Claudia lol It left me with a lot of questions, I'm not sure what is going on, but I know I want to find out!! lol Great jobEllienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-16758785736679927692010-12-13T12:07:32.523-08:002010-12-13T12:07:32.523-08:00Yeah, I definitely thought female, but looking bac...Yeah, I definitely thought female, but looking back I don't see anything that points that way. Probably just me.Jeff Hirschhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15358790876179003623noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-64692864490312085852010-12-13T10:29:24.105-08:002010-12-13T10:29:24.105-08:00I assumed the character was a male when it said &q...I assumed the character was a male when it said "and Sarah takes my hand." To me it made Sarah seem like his girlfriend or something along those lines.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-38294947580516951232010-12-12T07:38:25.674-08:002010-12-12T07:38:25.674-08:00btw, Jeff, (if you're still reading?)the MC na...btw, Jeff, (if you're still reading?)the MC narrating is a male. Did you just assume female because I am one, or did something about the writing make you think female? <br /><br />anyone else reading on this point?gae polisnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10491813685110351809noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-88332496801898448012010-12-12T07:21:45.451-08:002010-12-12T07:21:45.451-08:00Caroline, thanks! I missed seeing a snippet of you...Caroline, thanks! I missed seeing a snippet of your writing this week...<br /><br />Jeff,interesting point. I'm going to look at that on revisions. I think you might be right. <br /><br />gaegae polisnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10491813685110351809noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-52659337326377825492010-12-11T20:35:12.470-08:002010-12-11T20:35:12.470-08:00Hi Gae-I like this alot and am definitely intrigue...Hi Gae-I like this alot and am definitely intrigued. The only thing I wonder about is the NY scene you start with. It comes and goes so quickly I wonder if you can do a bit more with the confusion about where she is and her state of mind before you drop it. Perhaps more detail at the beginning, a slightly longer NY story, and/or a time when the realities are mixed before she pulls herself out of it. Could be interesting to create a kind of ambiguity before we're on solid ground again. <br /><br />Like the VanGogh stuff alot. Had a moment where it reminded me of David Morrell's story, "Orange is for Anguish, Blue is for Insanity" A cool little story if you can still dig it up.<br /><br />Enjoyed your's too Megan! Intense stuff. Can't wait to see where that goes.Jeff Hirschhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15358790876179003623noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-86994285094546513132010-12-10T10:49:49.437-08:002010-12-10T10:49:49.437-08:00Room by Emma Donoghue? I have that on my headboard...Room by Emma Donoghue? I have that on my headboard, its waiting to be read still. <br /><br />Anyways. It really hooks me, I want to know more of whats going on. I feel about as confused as the MC does. Very nicely written. <3<br /><br />No little excerpt from me this time.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-74210026232328181822010-12-10T08:38:52.101-08:002010-12-10T08:38:52.101-08:00thanks, Jody... means a lot coming from you.
Mega...thanks, Jody... means a lot coming from you.<br /><br />Megan, very disturbing and well written. Poor girl. It's reminding me a bit of Room which I just finished reading (not YA). Would be a good thing if you could get it done soon!gae polisnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10491813685110351809noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-74042583431425157562010-12-10T08:14:44.205-08:002010-12-10T08:14:44.205-08:00Whoa, Megan, VERY intriguing. Yikes! Great!Whoa, Megan, VERY intriguing. Yikes! Great!Jodyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03418253504761029445noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-2641307193537780742010-12-10T08:10:50.833-08:002010-12-10T08:10:50.833-08:00Not sure much of my writing is appropriate for thi...Not sure much of my writing is appropriate for this blog, but here's a little snip with little violence and no foul language.<br /><br /> He practically threw me back in the closet. He grabbed the lamp, my plate from the night before, and he took my clothes and left leaving me wet, cold, and in darkness. I crawled to the little door at the end of my closet, opened it up and went through. I continued toward the vent around the corner. Though I was freezing, I unwrapped myself from my towel, and dropped it to the floor, then I slithered my way up into the vent. Without clothes on, I had more room to wriggle around, but still got caught up at the hips. Another few days of not eating would probably do it though.Megan Bostichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08811715491350987530noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-70786814208579866352010-12-10T06:57:22.910-08:002010-12-10T06:57:22.910-08:00In all honesty: this, for me, is the best writing...In all honesty: this, for me, is the best writing of yours I've EVER READ (and that's saying somethin', considering how well you write!). I absolutely love the pacing, the neat switch, the language. Totally hooked me.Jodyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03418253504761029445noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-51295150640097695912010-12-10T06:47:20.980-08:002010-12-10T06:47:20.980-08:00Thanks, Megan. It IS choppy, of course there's...Thanks, Megan. It IS choppy, of course there's a reason for that if you keep reading, but it remains to be seen if it's too choppy to keep reading. The narrator is under a heavy fog of confusion as the book starts... will be interesting to hear other feedback if I get it. <br /><br />No little excerpt from you? :)gae polisnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10491813685110351809noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782322998406687709.post-15090939825336102222010-12-10T06:43:08.882-08:002010-12-10T06:43:08.882-08:00I like it. How's that? Kidding. I love it, ...I like it. How's that? Kidding. I love it, but if I had to say something about it, the first paragraph reads choppy to me for some reason.<br /><br />But I love how you're incorporating Van Gogh in this novel. You have a knack of bringing the classics up to date for today's youth whether it's Steinbeck or Van Gogh.<br /><br />But just in this little bit, you get a feel for the protagonist. I think this will probably be a great novel when it's finished. :)Megan Bostichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08811715491350987530noreply@blogger.com